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| poemomm |
 Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 1:25 pm |
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After having been bumped from Sh three times for minor grammatical details (apparently we're NOT allowed to take as much license as JKR, sigh) I have decided to search for a specifically grammar picking beta.
1. The fic is completed
2. Over 30 chapters (about 52,000 words)
3. I expect a quick turn around (2-3 days)
4. I do NOT expect plot/characterization beta-ing. Brit picking is okay IF you're actually an expert/British.
5. I am looking for someone who is VERY detailed about the grammar. I've been over this about 5 times, and corrected it per the SH admins corrections 3 times, but apparently I am still missing little things. I want to submit and be done with it. Capiche?
5. I will send the doc long text via email. I expect the doc back (with corrections in [bold] via email, long text.
Following is the text of the first chapter, so that you can determine if this is your cup of pumpkin juice. Note -- I have NOT included the italics etc, as I am burnt out and don't feel like formatting this for a preview thread. If this interests you I will send the formatted doc. thanks:
Summary: A Satire (look up the definition if you're not sure) to honor JKR's obsession with Jane Austin. Don't worry -- it's not a Regency Fic. It's also not a time travel Fic, per se. This is based off of the brilliant deduction that the trouble with time travel is that, when done right, it changes nothing. Hermione Granger goes into the past to try and change the future. How Gryiffindor. The problem is, when she gets there all she finds is one very grumpy Snape. Eventually a very happy and consistently snarky SSHG. Have fun!
A/N Just a plot bunny that’s been running through my head, having babies. Anyone who knows me, knows I’m never generally serious, but this took on a life of its own. This is meant to be AU, but it does have some HBP plot spoilers, and is generally HBP compliant. Some. But, like I said – AU. Perceived errors are intentional and useful for tweaking the minds of the readers. I've done my research. If something doesn't seem to match canon, keep reading. Chances are I'm throwing a few red herrings in on purpose. *grins*
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Hermione stared at her friend with compassion. It shouldn’t have to be like this she thought, as ideas began to form in her mind. They were readying for the Yule holidays, packing trunks and preparing for festivities. His whole life has been ruined...for what? So that he can sacrifice himself on the altar of the Phoenix. Harry Potter, the-boy-who-didn’t-get-a-choice. Hermione sighed. If only there was something I could do.
She was frustrated. The brightest witch of her age – she knew it, even without the grades – and she was flummoxed when it came to helping her friend. If only I could take it all away... If only I were powerful enough to – “I’ve got it!” Hermione began to pace the floor of the common room with excitement.
“What?” Harry, who had been contemplating the Christmases that might have been had it not been for Lord Spoilsport, glanced up.
“Harry, I know what to give you for Christmas.”
“Oh.” Harry’s shoulders slumped. He had thought for a moment, from the look on her face, that Hermione was going to tell him something significant...like the location of the Horcruxes, or the secret to killing Voldy for once and for all.
“I’m giving you the gift of freedom.”
Harry rolled his eyes. “I’m hardly a house-elf, Mione.”
“No, but you’re treated like one. Seriously, Harry, would you really prefer to fight him....if you had a choice?”
“What do you think?”
“I don’t think you would. I think you’d rather be at home, with your parents–“ Harry flinched. “Let me finish, Harry. With your parents having a safe holiday in a safe world.”
Harry’s expression darkened considerably, “Well, we can’t have what we want, can we?” he asked sarcastically.
“Well, maybe we can.”
Harry stared at her in disbelief, “What do you mean?”
“I’m going to change it, Harry.”
“Change what?”
“Everything. I’m going to go back and change history.”
Ron, entering from the boys’ tower, his mouth stuffed with chocolate frogs, looked at the confused face of his best friend, and the bright eyes of his – well, his...he didn’t know WHAT to call Hermione. Girlfriend would be nice but... He shied away from the thought. ”Who’s going to change what?”
Harry snorted, “Hermione says she’s going to change things. Make it so Voldemort –“ he rolled his eyes as both friends winced, “– never... what, Hermione? Voldemort...”
“So he never gains a power base. So he never rises. So he never –“
”Don’t be ridiculous. That’s impossible. What, are you going to go back in time?”
Hermione’s eyes shone. “Yes.”
Harry snorted. “And how do you expect to do that exactly?”
“I’ll use this!” From her pocket, Hermione pulled out a Time-Turner.
“Hermione!” Ron reacted strongly, “I thought you said –“
Hermione waved him off impatiently. “I promised our Head of House that I would try to win the record for most NEWTs next year... Ravenclaw’s held the title for the last 15 years... and Slytherin before them. I had intended to spend the holiday – “
”Studying,” her friends finished for her, exchanging knowing glances.
“It will never work,” said Ron, after a pause.
Hermione bristled. “Why not?”
Ron, who despite his laziness in academics, was secretly rather brilliant, answered, “First Law of Chronodynamics, Hermione. Whatever you do in the past will be reflected in the present. Anything you might do, you’ve already done. The present reflects the past. If you could change it substantially, then at this “now” you wouldn’t have a reason to go back and change the “then”, which means you wouldn’t go back; so the past wouldn’t be changed...”
Hermione cut him off, “Spare me the theories, Ronald. I’m going to try.”
Her friends shrugged their shoulders. Convincing Hermione against what she had set her mind to do was next to impossible.
“So...” Harry hesitated, “when are you going to?”
“It's 'to when are you going,' and I’m going back to the beginning. If I can convince the Death Eaters –“ here Hermione sighed as her friends winced, “to change their stripes, Riddle won’t have a power base.”
Harry laughed. “Have fun, Mione. I hope it works, though I tend to think Ron here is actually right for a change.” Ron hit Harry particularly hard.
Hermione grabbed her trunk. “Hermione..wait!” cried Ron, realizing a moment too late that she meant to jump immediately. Hermione saw, but didn’t hear her friend as she pointed her wand at the Time-Turner and cast a spell. Ron watched his friend disappear just before he finished, “There won’t be anyone there – it’s the holidays...Hermione.”
He looked over at Harry. “Ah well, we’ll see her soon enough. Don’t worry, she can’t change anything...” he said, not noticing the disappointment that crossed his friend’s face as he responded.
“You’re probably right.” |
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| Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 5:29 pm |
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just a note: this particular chapter has been corrected and accepted via Ashwinder SH, so it doesn't need beta-ing. To further clarify: I am looking for a beta for future chapters, not this one...
You can see the corrected doc at Sh, under "The Trouble With Time Travel." |
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